Slow start, maybe will build more

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The setting of the scene was interesting - I felt a little like I got to know the characters. Although I have to be honest, the way Henry was written sounded quite unrealistic and more like a robot with his ‘homage to Grace’ and being in such a hurry to get to her that he died. It seemed somewhat dramatic and not all that much like a sequence for a person’s last moments. Unless Grace was kind of abusive and he was worried that she would kill him.

Then the part about the moth seemed like a rip off of that video that was doing the rounds a few months ago with the bat that was in a kitchen of an Irish family. Perhaps it is also how this character’s family would react but it reminded me a little too much of that.

I also feel sorry for this ‘Andy’ who Grace is going to project all of her feelings for her dead partner onto. She doesn’t sound like she is seeing him for the person he is and I can’t imagine that that will lead to a happy ending or anything other than a miserable ending for everyone involved. Unless it relies on a completely unrealistic ‘happily ever after’.