Hard Work!
I am sorry to say I found the first sample hard work as there were a number of sub plots at the beginning. I assume that as the story progresses the story becomes more clear and the different stories all come together.
However the sub-plots were good in their own right - it's just the jumping from one to the other that I found distracting!
However the sub-plots were good in their own right - it's just the jumping from one to the other that I found distracting!