First line didn't grab me
'Wrapped in darkness beneath the trees I watch rain falling on the earth where
I have slept for so long'. Not a great opening line and most descriptive lines are not engaging. The first page continues to be a long description of the rain. Very dull indeed.
I have slept for so long'. Not a great opening line and most descriptive lines are not engaging. The first page continues to be a long description of the rain. Very dull indeed.