Introductory scene of the book is well thought out and the plot is gripping enough that I felt the urge to read on. However, I did feel that the first few paragraphs repeatedly compared one thing to another making it harder to get into the flow of the overall story right from the start.
The line "That’s when it happened" was out of place for me. I would have liked more of a suspense or build up in order for there to be shock value in that single sentence paragraph. The scenario itself is enough to shock with the disappearance of the man leaving only his cloak.
Overall I felt that the characters were identifiable and therefore easy to follow as the story progressed. The plot line followed a logical and methodical pattern which kept me engaged but also understanding of what had happened so far and where the story was leading.
Small suggested amendment: "No one had noticed the bloody tracks in all the excitement, but as Tavi had neared the carriage, a white dove had flown
out of the linden tree." - Instead of 'had flown' I would suggest 'flew'.
The line "That’s when it happened" was out of place for me. I would have liked more of a suspense or build up in order for there to be shock value in that single sentence paragraph. The scenario itself is enough to shock with the disappearance of the man leaving only his cloak.
Overall I felt that the characters were identifiable and therefore easy to follow as the story progressed. The plot line followed a logical and methodical pattern which kept me engaged but also understanding of what had happened so far and where the story was leading.
Small suggested amendment: "No one had noticed the bloody tracks in all the excitement, but as Tavi had neared the carriage, a white dove had flown
out of the linden tree." - Instead of 'had flown' I would suggest 'flew'.