I liked the atmosphere of the whole book. Bleak, gloomy, cold. Everything gave me the chills.
But if I were the editor of the book, I would do a few things before getting it published:
1) I would change the order of the chapters. I think first has to come the proposition of the robbery. That's sort of the only real event in the first 30 pages. The rest is introduction. And there is no other hook. Thus, I would move the whole section on Gabriel and Liam at the start.
2) put some signposting. I find it difficult at times to understand where I was and what I was looking at. Especially because I am not used to Swedish names (of places in particular) and surnames.
Overall, it didn't particularly hit me like a fantastic book, but there might be something interesting lurking in the rest of the book.
But if I were the editor of the book, I would do a few things before getting it published:
1) I would change the order of the chapters. I think first has to come the proposition of the robbery. That's sort of the only real event in the first 30 pages. The rest is introduction. And there is no other hook. Thus, I would move the whole section on Gabriel and Liam at the start.
2) put some signposting. I find it difficult at times to understand where I was and what I was looking at. Especially because I am not used to Swedish names (of places in particular) and surnames.
Overall, it didn't particularly hit me like a fantastic book, but there might be something interesting lurking in the rest of the book.