A nice premise, and good grammar/writing structure. The characters are for the most part compelling, but the main character does seem to be a little all over the place in terms of characterisation.
The way it's written makes it a little confusing as it feels like it's jumping back and forth between the present and future with no obvious separation between the two.
The way it's written makes it a little confusing as it feels like it's jumping back and forth between the present and future with no obvious separation between the two.